Sunday, July 10, 2011

Forget Him Comments

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Forget him
Forget his name
Forget his Kiss, his warm embrace.
Forget the love you once Knew, Remember he has someone new?
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Linda Damato
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Cleveland Gibson 10 July 2011

Forget him Forget his name Forget his Kiss, his warm embrace. Forget the love you once Knew, Remember he has someone new? What about a line by line edit? Maybe then: Forget his name, his burning kiss, the love you once knew. Remember now he's gone. Alas with a young girl too. You might continue if you fancy seeing how it turns out. Best

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Cleveland Gibson 10 July 2011

Too many 'Forget' and POV mentions he, you and I.

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