Wednesday, June 18, 2008

Geraldine Comments

Rating: 4.0

So, you say that this is the end
I can't say that I've ever had a better friend
You take these moments that we've had
And say 'how can you feel sad'
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Adam Thoms
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Greenwolfe 1962 18 June 2008

I gave this an 8 but I would have scored it much better if it had been shorter. There is no need to repeat yourself in a poem unless it is with a rhyming word or there is a phrase that you repeat for a useful purpose. That was not the case here. This poem is too long . GW62

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