Insipid Tremors Comments

something tells me there is a good (for me) poem hidden here, but i can't seem to be sure i am following your thoughts. it has something to do, i'm sure, with the punctuation.........so many commas! and maybe too few periods. i don't know. are you talking about a deceased love who is now in or near heaven? ? ? maybe i should just accept the poem as it is. if i just listen to its sound and not try to understand it....like music when i don't listen to or comprehend the lyrics...i do like it. and the thing about BEES intrigues me but is a mystery to me. thanks for sharing.