0s1 Silver

Insomnia - Poem by 0s1 Silver

The night ends with swirling emotions.
Thoughts sharp as a blade,
cutting through sleep.
Flashing lights in darkness,
not in sight but in my mind.
Once again I fall,
into this endless nightmare.

Topic(s) of this poem: insomnia, night

Comments about Insomnia by 0s1 Silver

  • (10/5/2015 11:18:00 AM)

    Very good imagery, one thing maybe to improve, your sentences are incomplete at times and words that should be plural aren't. (The night end(s)) (Thoughts sharp as (a) blade cutting through rest. - rest of what? incomplete thought) (light(s)) Other than that your work is excellent, I love it! Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn (Report) Reply

    0s1 Silver (10/6/2015 4:39:00 AM)

    Thank you for the feedback, I'll edit it^^ I'm glad that you like it :)

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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 11, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, October 6, 2015

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