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Dear Patricia, Thanks for your invite to comment on your poems. Well, the topic chosen by you is nice but the presentation has to be sharpened. The submission should never be directed as a speech.What you want to convey should be presented in a capsule of metaphor or imagery where the reader easily can relate to. Less said is always better.I feel you should change two words 'inattention'and repetition of 'only just brushing' and 'hastily' should be replaced by 'hasty'.You can refer to any Thesaurus for replacement. Don't take it as discouraging.I feel, you have possibility and this is to help only. Liked the topic rated at 8 Rajkumar

I think this could happen in the busy metros, where people are always in a rush to reach their destinations, hence don't have time for other issues. In many cases it requires real effort and hard, to meet both ends, so we are happy living within ourselves. Nice observation. Life is getting to be monotonous, and we are slowly turning into machines.....................