Monday, September 14, 2015

Letting This Mind Travel Comments

Rating: 1.5

Easy-going, laid-back, relaxing in fantasies of musical
rhythms, letting this mind travel along their measures.

Going into other dimensions and universes where intellect
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RoseAnn V. Shawiak
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Kay Staley 14 September 2015

Definitely speaks of the poem we hold subconsciously. Thought provoking, but written in a way that the reader soon forgets the poem. If I may advise, try for a bit more strength of sound, (maybe some meter or rhyme, or a tad harsher language) but be encouraged because you show the strength of idea in this poem.

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RoseAnn V. Shawiak

RoseAnn V. Shawiak

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