Adam McKim

Rookie - 222 Points (11/12/1984)

Lies (The Mirror Sestet) - Poem by Adam McKim

Lies from you in the sweetest guise,
guise you were, spilling lies.
Tears on my pillow with all my fears,
fears of drowning in all my tears.
Pained with truth, my heart is stained,
stained with lies, my soul is pained.

'I love you' you say, your greatest lie,
lie about love between you and I.
True, you spoke it and I said it to you,
you said it as words, I said it as true.
With him you are not, that was a myth,
myth filled with lies, it's me you're not with.

Poet's Notes about The Poem

This poem is in the style of the Mirror Sestet. No meter for this style and it can either rhyme or not rhyme. I chose to rhyme. It's pretty simple.

The first word of line 1 rhymes with the last word of line 1.
The first word of line 2 is the last word of line 1.
The last word of line 2 is the 1st word of line 1.

And so on...

Comments about Lies (The Mirror Sestet) by Adam McKim

  • Adeline Foster (9/14/2012 4:49:00 PM)

    You set yourself a challenge and you aced it. Reminds me of the Sestina. The very best one ever written is by Elizabeth Bishop. I plan to use her's when I have a Poetry Reading, coming up in Boonsboro, MD Library on Thur, Dec.13.
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  • Sina Farajzadeh (9/9/2012 12:33:00 PM)

    Deep meaning. Beautiful and artistic (drowning in my tears!) , I didn't know this style. Somehow close to cycle sonnets, but still different. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • (8/17/2012 12:56:00 AM)

    a clever write with an easy flow. nice one. (Report) Reply

  • Margaret Haig (8/16/2012 6:13:00 PM)

    You show you are writing about either yourself or someone who has been cheated upon by a person who said they loved you, then goes behind your back. I know how you feel it happened to me. My ex said he loved me then very seriously abused almost slit my throat. If it was about you it is good to write down to ease the pain. Great work (Report) Reply

  • Connor Whyte (8/14/2012 10:03:00 PM)

    This is painful but all in all is so poetic and pure talent outstanding write. (Report) Reply

  • Tiana Webb (8/14/2012 7:26:00 PM)

    Another great poem, pity this one is about something so bad. I like this style of poem. I might try it out myself ; P
    You, as a poet, are an inpiration to the rest of us. We don't know how strong we are until being strong is the only choice we have, and at the most important moments of our lives, we realise who are our friends and who loves us, and who never will.
    Tiana xx
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  • Valerie Dohren (8/14/2012 1:05:00 PM)

    Excellent write, great form and subject matter. (Report) Reply

  • Kefentse Sathekge (8/14/2012 7:11:00 AM)

    i agree with your notes. pretty simple poem with no hidden metaphors. so no grey hairs for me trying to figure out what this poem refers to. great work :) (Report) Reply

  • Ashraful Musaddeq (8/14/2012 3:16:00 AM)

    stunning stunning (Report) Reply

  • Ellias Anderson Jr. (8/14/2012 2:40:00 AM)

    Liars are disgusting people that are so hateful. i hate their guts. this poem deliver a nice message with that meaning.
    the structure is as well as your previous works. nice and good.
    well done.
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, August 14, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 1, 2012

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