Tuesday, September 16, 2014

Lustful Love Comments

Rating: 5.0

She whispers in his ear sweet nothing.
Looks upon his eyes, sees right through his lies.
Sits upon him to feel his warmth beneath her.
Lays besides him only to feel him near her.
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Priscilla Colon
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Bri Edwards 16 April 2017

I got an almost-laugh from the last line. I happened upon your site by mistake while heading for Lora Colon. To MyPoemList. Nice. But in 4th line I'd use lies beside. I'd say she got lucky when he left her. So did she....got lucky. bri :)

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