Tuesday, May 20, 2008

Meaningless Radiance Comments

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The mother is sleeping in western California
Just inches from the sea,
Sleeping like a virginal epitaph to her
Adolescent roller rink,
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Robert Rorabeck
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Barbara Terry 20 May 2008

In Stanza 6, second line, you have 'Furry' indicating that there is a small mammal. Did you mean 'Fury', as in the rage of the storm? This poem is a very surreal look into the human condition. A condition that cannot be undone, because the people won't allow it to be undone. The images within the lines make us really take a good look at ourselves. A 10 for this, and thank you for sharing. Love & hugs, Barbara

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