Monday, July 19, 2010

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Douse the lights, let darkness creep in. all said and done in light will be our reflection in the dark. Search for my shadow, I’ll search for your shadow. How worthy it would be to find you.
I’ll linger in the dark for awhile, awaiting for your heart to let me in. There, I’ll find the serenity I long for.
Your light will shed grace upon me.
Moment! ! Haven’t you found my heart?
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majid Alsaady 25 July 2010

u let the feelings tear u apart to master the core of the sentiment but the simple language wont convey.thanks for the invitation l

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Broken Heart 20 July 2010

Hnmm... Great poem!

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Paul Wilson-suffield 19 July 2010

Hi, You asked me to read it. However full of passion, do you really want to trip on your tongue whilst reading? Would you rather flow as on waves to the shore? Sorry this may not be what you wish to hear but I have to be honest. I love the words and the passion just not the structure.

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