Moving On Poem by Lovely Kayla Bear

Moving On

Rating: 4.0


Moving on is the hardest
thing to do after a
break up from the person
you truely love more
than your own life
nothing else helps not crying
not even laying around
not even hiding in your
cold little room will help
just move on its better that way

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rachael Curtis 14 February 2010

I like it. Its emotional, but its as if you're trying to help other people too. =) But I would reccomend that you change the word 'hard' at the end of your second line. The repetition is kinda grating and halts the flow. But other than that, its good! ! =D

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