The new me is happy
the old me was sad.
The new me sees clearly
the old me was mad.
The new me sees a future
the old me always lived in the past.
The new me found herself
the old me let everyone else find her.
The new me is more confident
the old me was to shy to speak.
The new me is still in progress
the old me well she is the past.
Thanks to the old me the new me
can freely live at last.
So far I am liking it. Line 10: one little typo. :) Line 13: I suspect you meant to type: ...the new me the old me Bri :) If 13 were changed, I would send this to MyPoemList.
The new me has only very positive notes. yhat is wonderful. keep up. enjoy life, achieve a lot. God bless you, tony
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Savita, what i meant in last comment re line 13.......... - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - line 13: Thanks to the old me the new me followed by: line 14: can freely live at last. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - ............................IS THAT, in the poem, the old me seemed to be consistently a loser, one who could not be relied on to make ANYTHING 'better' of herself because she [i'm assuming a bit here]: 1 - was not happy, though this COULD have caused good changes 2 - was blinded by a tendency to be mad 3 - lived in the past, probably not giving much thought to the future, and was therefore not likely to improve her life 4 - could not find herself; she was lost! 5 - was not confident. this would be an impediment to becoming 'free to live' I think the Old Me may well have BECOME the New Me, but only due to some great help from others, including changing her attitudes about herself and her relationships to others. how is THAT for elaborating! ? bri :) if you still want to leave lines 13 and 14 as they are, of course you may. it IS your poem after all. i will even put it into a showcase if you say to put it in. i am starting to put poems into May now. bri :)