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I read this out loud and loved it, and the last line is a real stopper. You really slow down time and write very clearly of the orchid and I found a metaphor of love-making that worked, you say it all so freshly. I had a little trouble with the transition, 'into the afternoon and before the night escapes...' I can't yet 'see' this. I love every word and image of your poem. It's so close to perfect (so to speak) . I can be dense, you might be able to help me get it, as it is.