Ode to the people who were forgotten
They were once loved and cared for
Ode to their lives
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I was always taught that an ode was to almost suppose to be praising the thing or object being described; also appose to use metaphore to feel the emotion and relation and more of your opinion of the object. Otherwise, verry nice just not an ode maybe use a different repition.
I like the way you write!