Thursday, November 12, 2009


is what I need...

is what I want to be...

from food...

over the toilet
disposing of the fat...

another meal
because if I don't
I would surely not
be able to deal with the gain

inside because I know
what I'm doing is not right

Surely no one can see that
this eating disorder is killing me....
Jenna Marie
Branden Aeling 13 November 2009
since im not much of a critizer of the poem itself, seeing as there is no wrong way to do a poem i will critize the content. what you talked about it the subject of someone who is looking to be 'beautiful' or 'perfect' and i will say that this is how most young girls feel and think....when in all reality there is a man always in the background say 'wow shes beautiful.' I would suggest that we all share a part of ourselves in our poetry, if this is you... i will say this, perfection might be valued by most, but in all reality, true beauty comes from one sincere to the heart and who is open and that, that is not only poetry, that is beautiful
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Moriah Reyes 12 November 2009
:) very nice...I think it could be jazzed up a bit somehow...but I like it because it's to the point....its says what it needs to say. Very sad....i know many people will be able to relate to your poem...I know i can. :) I wish you the best of luck! :)
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Ying Escalona 12 November 2009
try yakult....................
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