Scent Poem by John Kipling Lewis

Scent

Rating: 4.2


lightly softly
touch inspire

open silent
moist admire

pushing pulling
hold require

urgent pressing
gasp perspire

cheeks, lips
(thinking slips)
wrists, hips,
(heart skips)
finger tips
(loving quips)
saliva drips
(time, slips...

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gina Onyemaechi 02 March 2006

Yes, John, I DO like it. Sensual and sensuous. Delicious. Warm regards, Gina.

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x... x... 14 November 2007

Your use of images in here is remarkable leading the reader to feel grapically what you have written from the scent to the liquid to the sound....excellent.! ! ! ! Marci.M.

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K Holoholo 06 November 2007

This is fun poem. I like it.

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Kath Moore 05 November 2007

1. Every cliche in the book. (I particularly (dis) like 'heart skips'. What does it even mean?) Generic, trite, and just bad. As an added plus: forced rhyme!

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Marie K 10 August 2007

Something about this reminds me of an eecummings poem, but I don't remember which one. Something about the way the words swing. Something about how I can feel the words before I can think them. nice.

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Donna Robertson 05 August 2007

You use of a very few words to describe a situation is amazing.

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