Tuesday, December 16, 2014

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The first day I saw you, you stole my breath
I had to make the first move, our eyes met
I was tied down, cause' I was taken
But you stole my heart, you had me shaken.
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Lade Kolawole
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Kim Barney 01 January 2015

Emotions expressed nicely, but needs tuning up on the grammar and the meter. Keep on writing.

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