Tuesday, March 25, 2014

Something About You Comments

Rating: 4.8

They ask me what you are to me
What do I say
Everything that they read in the air is more than I've portrayed it to be
But, whenever I think of you I go blank sinking
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LADY SHY
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susan lafay 05 November 2016

I like this poem :)

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Thomas Vaughan Jones 27 March 2014

You have the soul. That's the important bit. Now you have a duty to yourself to polish up your techniques and create more rhythm/assonance into your words. Discipline the metre of your lines. (And don't try too hard with the rhymes.) :) Hugznstuff

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Sandra Feldman 25 March 2014

Very good try, I mean poem, Miss Shy. Welcome aboard!

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