The only suggestion I have is to maybe to change your line breaks a bit in the first few lines...maybe like this?
Layers of dust
thickner on the mirror
water makes the smuts
prominent:
I like what you are saying here just think it needs different line breaks to make it easier to read. But that's just one thought. I could be wrong.
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The only suggestion I have is to maybe to change your line breaks a bit in the first few lines...maybe like this? Layers of dust thickner on the mirror water makes the smuts prominent: I like what you are saying here just think it needs different line breaks to make it easier to read. But that's just one thought. I could be wrong.