The Night Poem by Daipayan Nair

The Night

Rating: 4.0


I break my house
where there is light.

I shatter at places
where the pandemonium
peeps into.

I stare and keep staring
where many wings leave me
and only a few return.

I feel lost in her palm shade
where I am present
without a gaze.

I hallucinate in circles forever
where they stir me
till their confusion, meeting me
still being unsure.

I forget myself
as the first page folded,
tucked under a cup
of recreation.

I try remembering
where I am the first word
in the last voice.

I gather myself once again
where I can touch
myself without light
and feel, I can continue.

Friday, December 16, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: existentialism,love,metaphysical,surreal
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Eliza Anne Jones 16 December 2016

An intriguing, complex and well-written piece. I would suggest a revision to the lines three through five as follows: I shatter at places into which the pandemonium peeps. It's grammatically correct whereas the first version is not. The rest of the poem is perfect. Respectfully, Eliza Anne Jones

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Silchar, State - Assam, India
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