The Sky Poem by Muhammad Iqbal Hossain Rasik

The Sky



a vast hope waiting
the clouds floating on the blue
the clouds in a rhythm
the colours of rainbow in a lovely row
seems the wind coming towards
the star flashing at night
moonbeam enlightened the whole sky
the sun light welcomes a hope
day light on its own way
Look at the sky moon stayed in a rhythm.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ravi A 04 December 2016

Look at the sky is highly repetitive and takes away the charm of the essence of the poem. The same ideas can be reformatted with your own skills. Telling something does not constitute the aesthetic dimension of any poem. It requires a different approach.

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