This Poem by Cesar Herrera

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This line
These words
This time
I'll go passed the herds
I'll keep it going til I aint fine
I'll go till nine
Or dropp and start to climb

This plegde
Keeps my from going over the edge
I'll sit on the ledge
And stand in between the wedge

The curses
Brought me down to my worstest
Call the nurses
I've lost in a versus

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

worstest? i know it was most likely deliberate, but i don't think it works. besides, what is the idea you are trying to convey? i'm not being told anything here. you are obviously influenced by hip-hop, which is fine. but even (true) hip-hop heads dropp knowledge in every rhyme they write. keep at it, you just might get there. Jake

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