We Are But A Flower Comments

i agree that there's something passe about rhyming poetry, but forming all your work as a series of rhymed couplets shows some great crafting skills. Frost called it 'playing tennis with a net.' Anyone can return a shot when there is no net.

Sharon, I like this one, especially the tightness of it. Don't lose that, its very important. I would suggest that you dropp the rhyme, however. Its tough to do it well. You do it ok, but the sound of unrhymed, tight poetry is a more contemporary, powerful sound, and with it (loose blank verse, as its often called) you'll capture the voices of great, modern poets such as Gjertrud Schnackenberg, Michael Longley, and George Bradley, to name a distinguished few. -LP