Within My Own Prison Comments

I Like this very much..... i would structure it, however, a little differently. Shorter sentences might make it more accessible: 'Here I linger; For here is where I’ve been cast into a prison Of my own being… For it is here I have been left to walk the hallway of memories from this loneliness deep inside my pain.' Of course.... it's your creation.... a great poem.... just may put some off by the sheer intensity of the lay-out. Cheers.. Roger.