You Poem by beverly morales

You



You were just an ordinary boy
Always bringing and playing your toy
You are always in the corner
Flipping and tearing your book cover

You are so timid and silent
But deep inside you are gallant
You have your own majestic world
Leaving it a secret and untold

Then one day you let me see
Your world that is full of camaraderie
I was shocked and in awe
In what I experienced and saw

I am thankful and very happy
Of what you are doing to me
Yet I am very, very sad
For I am falling for you so bad

I dont know if we fit together
For were not bound to each other
You live in a fantasy
And I live in a reality

But you made fantasy a reality
Moving mountains for me, leaving me with anxiety
You have proved to me that Im wrong
For you will do everything when love is strong

You make our separate worlds meet
Leaving the two of us so sweet
I will always love and be with you
For you will always be my you

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Herbert Nehrlich2 26 August 2009

You have good potential in writing. If you fight the urge to make everything rhyme and concentrate on your emotions and your message instead you will do much better. To practice your rhyme do four liners. Like this: Today, Sir I will take the time to write a poem just for you. I know your love of simple rhyme this one arrived out of the blue. Or, as a limerick: I'll take all the time I require to write just before I retire a small poem for you (it came out of the blue) it's a rhyme that you so much admire. You will see that the first one has all 8's. The limerick follows the rules as well except for the final line. That's acceptable (new rule) . Best to you and keep plugging along.... H

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