Young And In Love Comments

In one of your previous poems, Path of Life, you use rhyme very skilfully. In Words from a Breaking Heart the free verse is successful because of the word music. But, if you don't mind me saying so, I think you've overdone the rhyming here. I realise you're experimenting with different styles but I think free verse suits the naturalism of your messages. My advice is for you to trust your sense of rhythm more. There is some very good writing in this poem such as Their passions ever greater Imagining disfavour Use rhyme but more sparingly. Tom Billsborough