poor lil copycat Poems

**After reading my poem 'Simon Says, ' a few readers have requested that I extend it in length, so this poem is the second version that I am comparing to the original to see which is more successful. (You might want to read 'Simon Says' first to understand this better.) **

Simon says sing a song
Simon says stop
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Turning 12 is no party in the house
Turning 13 will be a sure louse
Turning 14 will be alot to handle
Turning 15 is no flame of the candle-
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Sticks and stones
May break my bones
But hurtful words
And evil deeds
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Oxymoron, reverse pyscology
Upside down, backwards
Back to front, inside out
Irony, homographs
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Is it perserverance
That makes us strive and achieve success?

Is it guilt
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***This poem is the lyrics to a really terrible-sounding song I wrote, I thought the words were half-decent so I decided to publish it here on Poemhunter...***

Walkin' down the street, come to school today
All rain, no shine, all work, no play
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Wake up, put a frown on my face
'Cause I'm gonna take the trip down to that evil 'school' place

We're gonna work and never be done
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If God really is looking down from above,
If He really does sprinkle the earth with His love,
Have I really done such a sin, such a crime,
That I must serve the punishment for all time?
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