Martin O'Neill

Rookie - 15 Points (20-06-1958 / Solihull, Birmingham, England)

Around The Square - Poem by Martin O'Neill

A shopping shark shimmers
In the city centre seize
Picking off the bargains
With a practised, fluid ease

Plastic card whispers
As designer bags fill
Parades her Prada handbag
Like a hunter with his kill

A Starbucks and a breather
On the corner of the square
Sips a skinny latte
And restyles a wayward hair

Then uncurls from her table
Like a languid, waking cat
Adjusts her perfect hemline
Shakes a sunbeam from her hat

So graceful on stilleto heels
She negotiates the square
The minnows part and shoal around
Parfum, lingers, on the air.

Comments about Around The Square by Martin O'Neill

  • Mihaela Pirjol (12/14/2014 6:24:00 AM)

    A really enjoyable read...beautifully descriptive! (Report) Reply

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  • John Brown (9/3/2012 9:19:00 AM)

    Nice poem Martin. The first line is a corker. (Report) Reply

  • (8/4/2012 3:28:00 PM)

    So you've seen her too's the Parfum that lingered on the air, that really got you....and the way she knew her bottom swayed as she walked away........ (Report) Reply

  • (4/13/2012 4:22:00 PM)

    Has an exceptional flow to it. She brings to mind P. Hilton or one of the Kardashians. Excellent write, quite vivid and cleverly crafted. tfs (Report) Reply

  • (3/13/2012 9:06:00 AM)

    Such a lot of things they buy, in the incessant search for happiness! Another gem!

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  • (3/2/2012 6:44:00 PM)

    Hey my comment did work! (Report) Reply

  • Diane Hine (3/2/2012 6:21:00 PM)

    Wearing stilletos to go shopping shows deep insecurity- they hurt! (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (3/2/2012 2:16:00 PM)

    Great poem - wish I could afford to buy expensive perfume! ! (Report) Reply

  • (3/2/2012 5:12:00 AM)

    As long as she uses her own hard earned money, we have nothing to complain about,
    Am I right?
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  • Jonny Brackney (3/1/2012 8:28:00 AM)

    a simple scenario described vibrantly. i love it. (Report) Reply

  • (2/29/2012 9:23:00 PM)

    I would change the word perfume to parfum! lol..more classy and French!
    I could almost smell the faint whiff..whoa, down, fellas!
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  • Wahab Abdul (2/29/2012 9:01:00 PM)

    well said and well pictured i like it very much. (Report) Reply

  • Okoye Charles Chukwudi (2/29/2012 2:41:00 PM)

    This good...
    This is poetry, a painting of a lady gone shopping.
    Your words really come alive....i like this very much.
    Your are no doubt, a true poet. Nice imagery.

    Please do read mine and leave a comment/criticism.
    A picture and Written at midnight hour...thanks
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 29, 2012

Poem Edited: Friday, March 2, 2012

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