9-5 All Rounder. Comments

I consider this a great start to a poem. I say start, 'cause I feel it should be longer; also, I think it would read better if it were written in line breaks, so the lines aren't so long. Perhaps, you might also consider taking of the, 'So' at the beginning, changing the word 'it' for 'he', makes 'him' seem more human, oh' and minimize conjunctions. (btw I'm no expert, just my opinion) Sometimes he gets lonely all tired, worn and gaumless. However, what's the least you can expect from a 9 - 5 all rounder