A Beam Of Light Comments

It's a pretty poem in which the poetess expresses herself very well. It's a pretty starting for her. There is a deep philosophy in it. I feel the whole poem. Good luck, poetess Aya.

in your poem there is positive thinking, but your likening is naive , also the ideas are not connected smoothly but great 1st step

Hello Aya, your poem is beautiful and reveal a soul deep and sincere and contains many rhymes. For me I appreciate more a completely rhymed poems. I encourage you to do so even if it costs you more time.