Wednesday, March 25, 2015

A Frightening Nightmare Comments

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I had a nightmare about you,
but their is nothing I can do.
I think that I ought to tell you,
only it's frightened me.
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Kimberly Hope
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Kay Staley 26 March 2015

The last line should say patient instead of patience unless of course the author spoke the words in that form with some intent. Sort of cliche imagery, but not to bad. easily identifiable cause we have all had that nightmare at some point in our lives.

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Kimberly Sheets 26 March 2015

Thank you Kay. I hadn't realized the patient instead of patience. As you can see I did take your advice and change it, it simply makes more sense. My poems have only been seen by a few friends, so it is always nice to be able to take new points of view into consideration. ~Kimberly~

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