Now we gamble on our love.
We shared the feelings equally
and all bets are off.
I open with a fear
you call my fear and raise an anger
so I lose this first round.
Then I bet a memory
you call my bluff
and raise the forgetting
and I lose again.
I bet a question,
you raise the silence
and do not win.
I bet the 'I love you' ace
your glance calls and raises
the 'I loved you' straight flush.
Resigned I accept the defeat.
(Well, I still have an ace up my sleeve: the Hope!)
I love this poem: the subject is the ambiguity of a long-term relationship which a necessary subject for our modern lives, and the style of the poem is an EXTENDED METAPHOR handled with depth and irony. I very much admire your inventiveness in combining the card game itself which is genuine with the subject of love, using the language of cards to reveal truths about love. Here's one example: in the last hand your ace loses to his straight flush, that is, your expression of love loses because he says his love is over; it all hinges on the verb love in present, then past tense, a grammatical distinction of one letter - love vs. loved. The ace of hope up your sleeve may be cheating, but as we say, All's fair in Love and War! Your poem explores the fact that Love is always a Gamble.
Thank you heartily for your wonderful commentary...As always, you understand the deepest side of my thoughts.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
My dear friend, this is a wonderful poem. I agree with everything Daniel said below. Extremely well done. I am no longer in Brazil, but back in the United States. I hope you and your family are doing well. Merry Christmas!
Thank you, my kind friend, and may the Light of Christmas shine upon you! Blessed be!
Thank you, my kind friend and may the Light of Christmas shine upon you! Blessed be!