An August Evening Comments
I sit here now
alone with my thoughts,
shivering, half-clad,
under a moon, half-lit
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The first stanza enthralled me. i was let down by the latter two. The sun down/sun up metaphor is a cliche that you don't do well enough to break out of here. The latter two stanzas could more potent metaphors, stronger language, and a more clever overarching metaphor than the sun set/sun rise one.
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3/12/2026 5:03:37 PM # 1.0.0
I like everything about this poem.