Betrayal Comments

Daniel, you are right created was to obvious. Thank you for your suggestion. I am glad you like it. Your comments are encouraging. Thank you. Sincerely Stone.

I really like this poem, Mark. If there was a part I'd change it would be 'have created.' I think it's a little too obvious perhaps go for 'you have sculpted' or 'you inspired'. Aside from that, I think it's great, the language is really well chosen and it stabs with emotion.

i like what you have written so far. let me know when it's finished.