Broken Inside Poem by Patrick Shields

Broken Inside



I sit on the cold porch curled into a little human ball
I try to catch my breath but I can’t seem to find any air
My heart starts to beat faster as my tears began to fall
Now I’m fully aware that this depressing world isn’t fair

The once blue sky is now turned a darkening spooky gray
I start to cry even harder as the salty rain begins to fall
If only they could’ve known that inside I’m still so very fray
Nothing is left in my cold heart except this rage nothing at all

I pound my fist into the ground as the sky above my head rumbles
My anger against the world soars as white lightning goes across the sky
I run my hands through my black hair as I feel heart start to crumble
Try to suppress this blind rage but I’m afraid it won’t stop in time

The rage takes over as my eyes change from a dark brown to white
The wind begins to pick up as funnel clouds began to quickly form
So now this violent blinding lightning is the only revealing light
As this dangerous blinding rage intensifies this catastrophic storm

I start to walk away every step intensifies the lighting and the thunder
Than I feel your warm arms embrace me and stop me in mid walking stance
As I try to deny the rage any satisfaction so as not to commit another blunder
I cannot let this rage win you have stopped me walking so I can not advance

My eyes turn from white back to brown as the wind ceases to blow
My heart began to rebuild itself as the thunder ceases to make any noise
The lightning stops as well and the rain ceases its destructive flow
Because you brought me back to this and conquered this destructive rage

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Joseph Daly 14 July 2007

Patrick, This is a great use of ryhme. I love the manner in which you avoid the stock-in-trade and use the form as it is supposed to be used. Some may see this as a beginner's approach. Personally I see it as an accomplishesd approach. Where you go from here is entirely up to you. As it is, I love this!

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