I looked at you and smiled the other day
I though you would see
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I love the way you wrote the poem. Deep and wise with Great imagery. Excellent write. I rate it 10. Thanks for sharing..... Please read and rate my poem 'A humble complaint' on page 2. Please use the search box by typing the name of the poem if the page doesn't open with the title of the poem.
This poem is almost exactly the same as 'But you didn't ' by Merrill Glass. It is the poem of a woman (Merrill Glass herself) who's husband had to fight in the Vietnam war and he never returned home. So I won't rate your poem at all. Because I'm afraid you were simply trying to copy the idea of another beautiful poem.
i believe it is intentionally written that way because of the perspective. If you noticed in Merrill Glass' poem it's written in the woman's perspective, but in this case it is the contrary where the perspective is that of the man. In my interpretation this was written in the idea of a complementing piece such as a response poem.