Hadyn Rodriguez

Rookie (new Mexico / new mexico)

Darkness - Poem by Hadyn Rodriguez

I'm swimming all alone in a pool of darkness
and I feel like darkness is slowly pulling me under
I yell for help but no one is there to hear it
I begin to see the water at eye level
and I kick and flail
fighting to stay above the darkness
But the darkness won't let go of its hold on me
and I slowly begin to give in
to the feeling that lies below the water line
the water starts to fill my lungs
the lungs that once held so much life
yet now they allow the murky water to replace that
I know that this path doesn't lead to happiness
But why doesn't someone grab my hand
pull me from darkness's grasp?
because no one knows I stand at the boundary
the boundary between light and dark
so I give in to the thing that holds me
All of the strength and all of the courage
that I once held in my heart
can't save me from the water
So I slowly slip below the world of unconsciousness
undetected by the occupants of that world
I don't want to fight anymore
I've given into darkness


Comments about Darkness by Hadyn Rodriguez

  • (7/21/2009 4:29:00 PM)

    ive read about 6 of your poems so far and this 1 is my favorite. when i read the other comments 1 word keeps popping up 'intense' and that word is spot on. very nice work. another masterpiece of yours. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/7/2009 4:20:00 PM)

    i like it but i cant tell exactly what darkeness is
    is he a guy?
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, March 7, 2009

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 18, 2010


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