Depressed Poem by David Garrett

Depressed

Rating: 4.5


through the years of the young
i've carried on strong through
the beatings and the names ive been called,
feeling transparent as i watched a step parent
put my mothers face through a wall.

as i'd gotten older
the world had grown colder
but i had found a warmth in her soul.

but the happiness she'd give
would be short lived
maybe i'd have been better without it at all.

you think im selfish for wanting to die
i think your selfish for making me stay alive
you might change your mind if you knew how it felt
no friends, no love and to be full of self doubt.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Artem Urlapov 11 April 2011

This is a really good poem! I particularly like the first 4 verses, lines such as 'as i'd gotten older, the world had grown colder; but i had found a warmth in her soul' or 'you think I'm selfish for wanting to die, but I think you're selfish for making me stay alive' are so evocative and well expressed. I'd suggest you to work out a bit the fifth verse, which sounds somewhat unclear, but I think that you've done a great job overall. Keep up the good work, all the best / Artiom

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