Doodles Poem by Warren Augustus de Guzman

Doodles

Rating: 2.5


The morning is fresh with thoughts and sounds,
of a day spent with a lady so enchanting.
Happy trinkets of love abound,
and feelings so utterly enthralling.

A kiss on her forehead,
out of pure sweet affection.
A kiss in love's stead,
to my soul's satisfaction

And now all i think all i dream,
are of this lady so enchanting.
So sweet it would be this scheme,
Should we joint the mere thought so thrilling.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sandra Osborne 03 January 2005

This looses the rhythm even more. Try counting the sylables in your lines, or try writing a 'prose' poem. Bob Dylan used to just throw words together without reason to get the flow of a rhythm. Try re-working this, keep writing.

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