Allie hanold


End Of First Love - Poem by Allie hanold

My heart aches, slowly breaking
My heart aches, sadness awaking

I feel unwanted, not pretty to you
I feel unwanted, a beauty untrue

For I wish, you loved me so
For I wish, it ended long ago

To save me from, this pain inside
To save me from, the tears I hide

This first love, burned so bright
This first love, now dark as night

The time has come, I am alone
The time has come, you're not my own

My heart aches, finally broken
My heart aches, words unspoken


Poet's Notes about The Poem

I wrote this poem a few days ago. Its about how im so inlove with this guy that ive been dating for 5 years 15-20. Through the good times and the cheating. And how im scared to be alone and don't want anyone else. How hard it is to cope with a truly broken heart

Comments about End Of First Love by Allie hanold

  • (3/18/2013 9:53:00 AM)


    I think you could have went farther into this. with all that you explained in your description, you could have added all that emotion to make the poem longer to truly get into description to really let it give a feel of your fears.
    Bad times will come and go, but the good times are the ones that show. :)
    Don't worry. The bad times are only temporary. More good will come to you in the future if you persevere.
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  • William Kd (3/10/2013 5:02:00 PM)


    Nothing hurts like a broken heart. Especially when you lose your first love. Beautifully painful. Thank you for sharing your injured love with us x. (Report) Reply

  • William Kd (3/10/2013 4:50:00 PM)


    Nothing hurts like a broken heart. Especially when you lose your first love. Beautifully painful. Thank you for sharing your injured love with us x. (Report) Reply

  • (3/7/2013 5:23:00 PM)


    Thank you ahmed mahmoud (Report) Reply

  • (2/20/2013 9:23:00 AM)


    Hey, i read your comment to come review this poem; hence i am here :)
    It's not a bad poem, the emotion of the speakr is expressed quite profoundly, yet there is this feel to it that lowers the whole poem iam not sure what it is, i think its the ryhme scheme maybe iam not sure: P,
    anyway, iam not much into romantic poems: P so i might be biased sorry haha
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  • (2/15/2013 6:24:00 PM)


    The sadness of a broken heart so eloquently expressed. Only time can heal … (Report) Reply

  • Titi Dale (2/15/2013 5:05:00 PM)


    Simple sentences that explain more than they speak aloud... This is a great poem... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, February 15, 2013

Poem Edited: Sunday, February 17, 2013


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