Forever Dark Poem by Joseph Lee 2

Forever Dark

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It was as dark as night
I had woken up at midnight
It was strange night
Chirp chirp chirp, the birds are chirping at night

What if it wasn't night? I thought
No what if it was morning and I couldn't tell
I slept again thinking I would just wake up in the morning
I woke up but it was still pitch black. I was blind

What will I do?
I had always wanted to be an artist
I had always wanted to drive a car
What am I going to do, my future is screwed up

I dream about being able to see my mother who died when I was born
Then I wake up feeling as bad as I have ever been
What will I do?
Now I'm just sitting here telling someone whom I can't see what to write

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Lee 29 September 2013

Use less connectives in your poem. There is too much connectives, and that makes the poem feel 'Uncomfortable'

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Abdulaziz Alagil 29 September 2013

what a grate poem, , looking forward to read more of your poems! !

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