Thursday, September 29, 2011

Golden Girly Comments

Rating: 5.0

The demon on you drips down to your toes

It causes your eyes to absorb all color
Your strength from it comes from
Warm water swishing in your belly and heart
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Terio Ruiz
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Pranab K Chakraborty 29 September 2011

The mirror tells me that we were once one 
 Because of our daring dash to drip the fruit... Nice expression to illustrate the oneness. Imagery and metaphors are used intelligently to keep its poetic standard.Sweet in sound but stiff to hold the wisdom. Write more...more... Regards, pranab 10+

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