Tuesday, May 13, 2014

He Lived Comments

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He Lived
So long she was disconsolate,
her only son was gone.
Years had passed and still she mourned,
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John F. McCullagh
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Very nice poem. Would like to make some suggestions (it's up to the writer) . Line 10 could be changed to read: the psychic scars we all bear and line 12: The burden of existence, all must pay the cost. Enjoyed it.

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