Heavenly Poem by Sadie jude

Heavenly

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sitten on island in the ocean
may seem kinda free
lying on a beach of golden sand
may sound as life should be
sounds like heaven but it ain't heaven
no siree
a billion waves of sea, you see
divide you from me
only you can make my world
heavenly

Monday, January 2, 2012
Topic(s) of this poem: beach,heaven,ocean
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Stella Mary 03 January 2012

You need to use capitals wherever possible... I've rewritten your poem.- Sitting on an island in the ocean, May seem kind of free. Lying on a beach of golden sand, May sound as life should be. Sounds like heaven but it ain't heaven, No, siree. A billion waves of sea, you see, Divide you from me. Only you can make my world, Heavenly........

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