Heavenly Poem by Sadie jude

Heavenly

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sitten on island in the ocean
may seem kinda free
lying on a beach of golden sand
may sound as life should be
sounds like heaven but it ain't heaven
no siree
a billion waves of sea, you see
divide you from me
only you can make my world
heavenly

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Stella Mary 03 January 2012

You need to use capitals wherever possible... I've rewritten your poem.- Sitting on an island in the ocean, May seem kind of free. Lying on a beach of golden sand, May sound as life should be. Sounds like heaven but it ain't heaven, No, siree. A billion waves of sea, you see, Divide you from me. Only you can make my world, Heavenly........

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