I Was Going To Write A Poem Comments

a good write, Cailey, but... - may I speak frankly? - why all those repetitions? and then, as a poet, you should use more metaphors and focus on your inner world.. as meditations on those glimpses of ''reality'' caught by your eyes.. Then let readers try their own representation of that inner world you display.. I mean, you should not simply tell a story.. Be a full poet (your soul - mind - is a poetic one, indeed) and not just a good writer.. ;) ciao Fabrizio