If I Had Ten More Minutes Poem by Savannah Oakes

If I Had Ten More Minutes

Rating: 4.3


If I had ten more minutes
and my voice was not faint
nor my face so devoid
or my mind so blank,
I would profess—

But I'm afraid of words
which might betray lips,
For what is kept
is of my eyes—
that impulsive organ
I've attempted to stray;
hooded, hazed.

Construing a montage
ever playing:
concerns, worries
fears, and doubts,
Come to life
in bursting light
whilst straining in the dark.

And if such creations
could speak—
or better
could be heard—
through the mist of passion
And masks of pride,

I would profess
All in my heart;
Every quaint murmur
Forsaken night and night.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
My English teacher, as always, went over the bell and didn't get to finish what she was saying to us. She emailed the class with what she had been saying and entitled the subject of the email: If I had ten more minutes. I read it and kept hearing this rhythm in my head, kind of how I expect some musicians do. I thought, wow that would make a great beginning to poem. AND HERE WE ARE. So I hope you like it.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Andrew Daglish 13 September 2013

a great poem. really well writen

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Kira Parson 24 April 2013

amazing. I aspire to write like you someday. The words flow on the page(or screen) . Loved it.

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Paul Brookes 17 April 2013

Something of a Shakespere sonnet here. I know it's not in sonnet form but it feels so lyrical and smooth. It has a beautiful flowing line. Thanks for sharing

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