Just When Comments

Just when i found myself soaring All the strings that held me up were cut I fell back to earth my breath knocked out of me And I'm not sure if i'm strong enough to take the next breath sweet and meaningful..hmm yeah 10/10

i agree witht he last poet but i still like eaither ways of reading it: D

Lauren, You could eliminate lines 2 and 6 and have a very smooth reading poem without cliche or the obvious. Keep writing. SAS