Sunday, September 12, 2010

Left Alone Comments

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Was she left out in the middle of the night alone?
with not a kiss, not a hug.
The rain fell like god broke his promise,
and the world would flood.
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Kirsten Leaver
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Kevin Carney 08 October 2010

The rain fell like god broke his promise, and the world would flood. She drifted through the water, like a letter lost at sea. These are great lines, I love the first one its such a great choice of words. You write is so interesting and had me hooked from start to finish.

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Terence George Craddock 22 September 2010

interesting story and twists, sing it in your mind, or speak it out loud, to achieve rhythm bliss :)

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