prashant shaurya

Rookie - 125 Points (07/04/1989 / bettiah now in delhi)

Lets Sharpen The Silence...! ! ! - Poem by prashant shaurya

Maintain silence
Listen to the breeze
For all it says
is to wipe the grease....

Maintain silence
Listen to its yell
That why as rabbits
do we all dwell...

It howls again
out of disdain
And asks us to rub
the darkest stains....

Let's sharpen the silence
And come out hard
To show the devil
that we won't retard...


Comments about Lets Sharpen The Silence...! ! ! by prashant shaurya

  • (4/21/2010 2:15:00 AM)


    Hey prashant, a beautiful poem it is......... i love the metaphors. Keep up (Report) Reply

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  • (2/18/2010 1:16:00 PM)


    beautifully expressed poem with metaphors used skillfully.silence skillfully silenced can take you into deep bliss of meditation.i enjoyed reading this poem.
    best wishes........ritty
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  • (2/11/2010 10:10:00 AM)


    hey this is a nice poem it makes me wonder bout us as individuals keeping silent and letting our words bein few God Bless (Report) Reply

  • (2/10/2010 10:29:00 PM)


    I Like The Metaphor's To Really Makes You Think You Know (Report) Reply

  • (2/10/2010 3:30:00 PM)


    nice implicit metaphor

    Let's sharpen the silence


    nice talking silence, nice poem, lovely to read..

    10/10
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  • Prashant Shaurya (2/8/2010 12:47:00 AM)


    Member: Marry Spain(through aprivate message)
    A thought-provoking poem, Prashant, and an unexpected framework in which to place the concept of silence. Thank you for sharing your ideas so skilfully.
    Mary
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/7/2010 9:20:00 PM)


    Maintain silence
    Listen to the breeze
    For all it says
    is to wipe the grease.......lovely poem and full of, wisdom....fine one

    rad mine... viriginity at stake..i miss... lovely life
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  • (2/6/2010 10:42:00 PM)


    Prashant
    you need to ask yourself, 'What is rhythm? ' Rhythm is flow. That's what it means. So poem have rhythm of the language, rhythm of beat, rhythm of the line, the rhythm of the rhyme, and rhythm of the stanza: but what holds all those rhythms together is the rhythm of the contextual flow of the poem. That's content. If the content is forced to make the rhyme it show up like a finger that's been hit with a sledge hammer. Forced lines for rhyme are a dunce cap. The context of the poem must flow into the rhyme and out of the rhyme like the rhyme wasn't there at all. That will make a good presentation. But there should also be metaphorical content and and good form to the poem too. You have the form down because of how you broke the lines and stanzas. But the music and metaphor suffer a lot in this poem. this is just my take on it, but you asked me to look at it. I only feel it is fair to tell you what I think and to qualify it by saying that is only my opinion. Good luck on your next poetical experience. Don't stop writing you got one of the three biggies under control. Just work on the other two And know that music flows and poetry is music. Have a good day Prashant.
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  • (2/6/2010 9:18:00 PM)


    Prashant well done!
    very nice and good poem with a wonderful advice.
    we can absorb the reality of life only if we will listen quitely.
    thanks for sharing this.
    good luck.
    take care
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  • (2/6/2010 10:21:00 AM)


    Let's sharpen silence to maintain calm in an environment that challenges peace. Wonderfully penned with a positive message. (Report) Reply

  • (2/5/2010 12:15:00 PM)


    dear prashant......when we practice silence our mind becomes integrated and joyous as we start a one pointed journey to realise ourselves and also the beautiful nature around us.lovely poem, and i really enjoyed reading itthanks for sharing.
    ritty
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  • (2/5/2010 9:46:00 AM)


    All great works of art begin in the
    silence of the creative soul. Ten
    for you.

    Kind regards,

    Sandra
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  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (2/5/2010 9:07:00 AM)


    Let's sharpen silence
    Till speech becomes unnecessary
    Let's sharpen silence
    Until it cuts everything imaginary...
    Well done my friend. Profound perspective.
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  • Ravi Sathasivam (2/5/2010 7:04:00 AM)


    Very good suggestion.
    Meaningful poem
    Well penned
    enjoyed reading it
    Thanks for sharing with me
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  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (2/5/2010 5:39:00 AM)


    go amidst the sound of noise and haste and remember what peace there may be in silence... avoid loud and aggressive persons because they are vexatious to the spirit.

    -DESIDERATA
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  • (2/5/2010 3:04:00 AM)


    ok, let's sharpen the silence...that is if we can....ur piece is nicely done.. (Report) Reply

  • (2/4/2010 11:54:00 PM)


    Actions speak louder than words... :) (Report) Reply

  • (2/3/2010 4:38:00 AM)


    Meaningful indeed, once in my life I have also come to conclude to not to say anything or any plans because the devil might hear it and contradict… there are so many things that’s good in silence, and truly, we need some-time with it… we need to make friends with silence, not just once in a while but daily, to assess and to relieve our thoughts and pains in many different way, in silence we will see.

    Nice poem!

    :)
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  • (2/3/2010 2:43:00 AM)


    a loud and indelibe message given out through the curtain of silence
    well written!
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 3, 2010



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