prashant shaurya

Rookie - 125 Points (07/04/1989 / bettiah now in delhi)

One Evening When The Sun Was Low... - Poem by prashant shaurya

One evening when the sun was low
I strolled down the road below
and deep in thoughts that had a flow
tried to recover the golden glow....

As the darkness began to grow
and to its nest got back the crow
I knew I had something to draw
by moving the brush to and fro...

And then I saw an old fellow
shivering with his head bent low
and with all might the wind did blow
making his heart beat even slow....

And to protect him, I did so
gave him my shawl and made him glow
then said, be brave and fight the woe
to put up a brilliant show


Comments about One Evening When The Sun Was Low... by prashant shaurya

  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (1/3/2010 1:48:00 AM)


    very nice write! ................. (Report) Reply

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  • Prashant Shaurya (12/19/2009 1:09:00 AM)


    member: Mary Spain
    a real achievement to find so many appropriate words ending with 'ow'
    well done
    mary
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  • (12/18/2009 9:05:00 PM)


    Nice rhyming lines........... (Report) Reply

  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (12/18/2009 12:03:00 PM)


    Eloquently expressed with a rich rhyming scheme and a fantastic flow. Well done my friend. (Report) Reply

  • (12/17/2009 4:22:00 AM)


    I liked the way it rhymed..well blended...
    and ofcourse the generosity and the message of kindness is good too.. :)
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  • (12/16/2009 7:15:00 PM)


    A well-rhymed tale of simple kindness toward a fellow human being. Lovely! (Report) Reply

  • (12/14/2009 6:50:00 PM)


    Very nice, i like the flow. Big 10 (Report) Reply

  • (12/14/2009 4:08:00 AM)


    This is very nice, Prashant! There you walk, deep in thoughts, 'they had a flow'... but you are interrupted by the sight of this poor man... and you let go of your thoughts... instead you give this man of your warmth... words are only words, anyway... but a helping hand to another human being, could be the difference between life and death... you made the right choice and I am sure the words will return to you... (Report) Reply

  • (12/11/2009 12:18:00 PM)


    nice revealing picture of humanity...well done prashanth (Report) Reply

  • (12/11/2009 7:17:00 AM)


    another lovely poem of yours.
    enjoyed reading it.
    very smooth flow of words.
    take care
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  • (12/11/2009 4:56:00 AM)


    Splendid choice of words! Keep it up! ! (Report) Reply

  • Ravi Sathasivam (12/9/2009 1:08:00 AM)


    'As the darkness began to grow
    and to its nest got back the crow
    I knew I had something to draw
    by moving the brush to and fro...'
    Beautiful write with full of passion and warmth
    Well done
    Enjoyed reading it
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  • Naseer Ahmed Nasir (12/9/2009 12:51:00 AM)


    It's a poem full of passion and warmth, very well rhymed. You are a kind-hearted person, prashant. Best wishes.

    Naseer
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  • (12/7/2009 8:26:00 PM)


    what a beautiful poem shared here..nice setting and well done! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (12/7/2009 12:36:00 PM)


    I think it took ur special mind and special time to rhyme this peom. Well done, i like it @ 10 (Report) Reply

  • (12/7/2009 12:28:00 PM)


    I think it took ur special time and special mind 2 write this. Well done (Report) Reply

  • (12/6/2009 6:55:00 AM)


    He was seeking vigour to warm his weary mind, but when he found his fellow man in the need of something to keep him warm, he was filled with compassion and gave him his shawl. An adorable touching poem. (Report) Reply

  • (12/5/2009 5:19:00 AM)


    a heartfelt sincere write about compassion and warmth! well done (Report) Reply

  • (12/5/2009 1:40:00 AM)


    Brilliant Prashant! Well done! It rhymed and had good rhythm too and flowed really well, a pleasure to read.

    Ruthie; o)
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  • (12/4/2009 8:36:00 AM)


    wonderful Piece my friend... keep it up
    * I published a new poem collection that I'd like you to read and leave your valuable comments and precious vote*
    thank you.....regards
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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 4, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, July 26, 2011


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